A curious little mind
Raised with one parent
Protected and guarded
With a "little" disability
Waiting for the wonders of the ocean to appear
"Hey dad! Maybe when I'm at school, i'll see a shark.
I highly doubt that.
Have you ever met a shark before?
No, and i don't plan to."
A curious little mind
who's heart's bigger than the ocean
his mind lives off of imagination
he is an innovator
Fear and curiosity took him away
He found himself in a new home
"I wanna go home. Does anybody know where my dad is?
Honey, your fathers probably back at the pet store"
Lonely and parentless
Friends are the closest thing to family
"From this point on you'll be known as sharkbait"
Known as something else
He discovers a newer him
his mind lives off of imagination
he is an innovator
Fear and curiosity took him away
He found himself in a new home
"I wanna go home. Does anybody know where my dad is?
Honey, your fathers probably back at the pet store"
Lonely and parentless
Friends are the closest thing to family
"From this point on you'll be known as sharkbait"
Known as something else
He discovers a newer him
Please work on your punctuation, as I couldn't tell who was saying what. For example,
ReplyDelete"Hey dad! Maybe when I'm at school, i'll see a shark.
I highly doubt that.
Have you ever met a shark before?
No, and i don't plan to."
Notice that you didn't close or open quotation marks, that you shoved it into one quotation? Unless one person is saying the quote, you probably shouldn't do that.
However, I did like that you put those quotes in. It helped connect yourself to the poem. I liked the overall poem, however, like I said, work on that punctuation!